First Draft : The Confirmation

1. What is my thesis?

Although quantity enables us to watch many sceneries, to spend enough time in a tour place is more useful experience.


2. What types of source am I using to defend my thesis?

I am using personal blogs and some examples of them, some reports about the travel trend.


3. Are my arguments mostly based on evidence, logic or emotion?

My arguments have no hard evidence. In fact, I think that is one of the biggest problems with my confirmation. I have good quotes from famous people, and a good example with the Chinese Room, but no statistics or studies to support my thesis. There are no emotional appeals either, but I don't think those would be useful.



To acknowledge the importance of quality in travel, let's consider a sayings firstly. This is related with the deep appreciation of travel. "What is written without effort is in general read without pleasure (Samuel Johnson)" If you felt that this saying seems dealing with one's effort, you are seeing right. What I want to say through this saying is you should spend enough time if you want to get something meaningful from it. To be busy to see as many attractions as possible would make people just remember the memory they were so hurry, not the appreciation about the place. If you don't spend enough time for it, it is natural to become hard to remember what you see.

  Are you still clueless? Then, suppose you are traveling France. Now, you just arrive at Louvre Museum and the tourist says you would spend 10 minuets in here. Can 10 minutes bring deep appreciation trough 10 minutes spending in Louvre which has more than 30,000 pieces of paintings? Do you think Mona Lisa with digital pixel is the same with real one? The understanding about the a painting must be different between those who observed it closely and those who caught a glimpse of it.
Christian Eilers, one of the famous bloger in travel and work as the journalist of Dauntless Jaunter , says like this in his article.

  I believe that the best way to educate ourselves, our society, and the people we come into contact with is to travel, but to do it in a way that we are able to soak up the culture, history, art, food, etc. of the places we are traveling to. 
  Also, in the blog "travel enlightenment" One say his own experience about a woman who just exhausted with competitive traveling.

I just met a woman who traveled Israel, Jordan and Egypt and was downhearted because of the rush of time. From my personal experience by visiting with many travelers and tourists, many at the end are mince meet – run into the ground with exhaustion.

  Considering their opinion, competitive traveling seems like fool's gold while qualitative travel make people feel affinity to places where they visit.

  Then, let's consider about the information. Though I agree with the fact thanks to the internet and other media we could get in anytime and anywhere, it is also true that limits still exist. I want to my own experience as a example of this limitation. My family and my grandparents went on a trip to Ijak island, which is almost at the end of the West Sea. We should find our lodging ourselves and we have no worry at the first time because we believed with smartphone we could find it easily. It was, however, a great mistake. Because that place was out of network connection, we had no answer but asking native citizens. That was not end. During the trip, we are supposed to visit a famous restaurant where we found through internet before leaving after fishing. The restaurant, however, was out of business when we visited there. My father explained our situation to people around of there and they gladly shared some their foodstuffs and let us know another great restaurant. The memory that I and my sister were so furious about the false information of the internet is very vivid. Through this experience I could know that internet is not always reliable and the interaction during the travel is very precious. Those who have such experience would feel empathy what I say.

  Besides, qualitative travel is beneficial to not only travelers but also attraction shops. Consider you are a owner of a souvenir shop in a famous zoo. Every travelers drop out and leave to somewhere else. Can you run your shop without customer in this situation?


Some might argue like this way like the saying of Christian Eilers's the article.

a person who travels to places for a quick moment is still accomplishing something, still experiencing a new destination, even if it is brief. There is no harm, and perhaps even a net positive that this form of travel can offer a person, as far as culture and education are concerned. A person who has traveled to 100 countries in a year is still going to have plenty of stories – that’s incontestable; perhaps the amount of stories can equal or surpass the stories of a person who traveled through one country in a year. One point in the favor of competitive travelers – these guys are more likely to be around people more often, as frequent journeys to and from destinations usually force one to submit to the joys that are travel transportation, such as planes. And being around people in a foreign destination is a learning experience, more times than not. Also, in just short minutes we can do many things; having a coffee break with a person I just met in there, appreciating beautiful scenery.

  Moreover, because of the development of information technology, we can get a lot of information what we want to know.

  However, how can we say he or she has completely enjoyed certain place even if he or she doesn't know anything about? How can we say "I have visited New York" even though I just spent 10 minutes in JFK Airport for transfer? Dropping out is hard to be travel.

  Furthermore, empirical information must have difference media cannot convey. How can media, especially internet, convey the very grandiosity of Genesis on Sistine Chapel ceiling through its monitor 100 times smaller than the paintings?

  Beside, even though information and appreciation has no problem, they cannot deny this; competitive traveling makes people exhausted mentally and physically. As they visit many places, they have a lot of place to remember and move by so much. Considering this, we could know qualitative travel is more effective than quantitative travel.